Talk:Urinary system
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Original version of this article was taken from NIH Publication No. 02-3195, a public domain resource which can be found at http://www.niddk.nih.gov/health/urolog/pubs/yrurinar/index.htm
Unencyclopedic?
The sections Who can help me with a urinary problem? and Points to remember do not appear to be particularly encyclopedic, but instead seem to be something that one would expect to be found at the source that this was taken from. I'd suggest renaming and re-writing the first section to make it more encyclopedic, and deleting the second section entirely. — Asbestos | Talk 12:41, 24 Jan 2005 (UTC)
- The whole article needs editing to remove "you". Encyclopedia articles do not directly address their readers. JFW | T@lk 22:19, 5 Apr 2005 (UTC)
I have finally decided to get rid of the dumbing down and preaching. We now have something that closer resembles an encyclopedia article. JFW | T@lk 07:30, 5 Jun 2005 (UTC)
